Hello, dear friends.

 

Me and my colleagues are going to attend an English course in Bournemouth, England and my principal asked me to send an e-mail to school we are going to go.  It �s not exactly an easy letter so I would like to ask you to read it and give me a feedback. I am sure there are some mistakes but it �s been almost 15 years I have written such kind of formal letter.

Thank you very much for your help, Michaela

  

Dear Sir,

I am writing to you because of an English course me and my colleagues are going to attend at your school between August 17 and August 28 2015. Because our course is being paid from the money of EU as a project, the certificates we should receive at the end, should have a specific requirements:

1. The name and the address of your institution

2. The whole name of attendant

3. Course title

4. The date of the beginning and the end of the course, number of lessons, place, the way of ending the course

5. Place and the date the certificate has been issued

Not a native speaker, but I would suggest some corrections:

 

" me and my colleagues"  

 

seems a bit out of style, in a formal letter/email like this, I would use

"I and my colleagues"

 

Also, the term

 

"whole name"

 

should be replaced with

 

"full name" 

 

and

"is being paid"

would sound better if you replace with

"is paid"

unless you are emphasizing the very present moment

 

and

 

"the way of ending the course"

is a bit too ambiguous for me to amend

 

Giorgi 

"is being paid" is fine. I understand Giorgi �s reasoning on this, but this situation is a little different. In this case the present continuous is being used in its "future" sense, for a planned activity.

 

 

"the certificates we receive (not "should receive") at the end should have (not "a") specific requirements:"

 

1. The name and (not "the") address of your institution.

 

2. The full name of the attendant  (as Giorgi said)

 

I agree with Giorgi about "the way of ending the course" being unclear.

 

5. The place and date the certificate was issued 

 

Bruce 

Thanks a lot.

 

Now I try to explain "the way of ending the course" maybe you �ll help me with a correct form.

 

We have to prove that we finished the course with some kind of exam and that shoul be written on the certificate. I also don �t like the way I wrote it but I am lost here. 

Bruce