Would some of the native English speakers be kind enough to  have a look below . One of my kids sent me this resume to send to restaurants in Bristol.

 

Could you just check if you could/ would say things this way? I �m not so used to writing resumes and want to make sure it �s alright! :)

 

I would be very grateful! 

 

 

Personal summary:

French 18-year-old, motivated and hardworking waiter with experience in a French bar and a gastronomic caterer, able to use exceptional hospitality skills and ability to provide quality and courteous service to the customers in order to maximize customer satisfaction.

Objectives:

To seek a position as a waiter in a restaurant in Bristol to share my passion for food and beverage by enthusiastically serving your guests. To improve my spoken English, visit the country and attend drawing classes. Working as a waiter is a pleasure for me.  

Hello,

 

I �ve highlighted the parts that I would want to change.

1) "gastronomic caterer"  - is this a traiteur? I would maybe say "events catering".

2) Delete "the" before "customers".

3) food and drink

4) I wouldn �t normally include this on a CV because it doesn �t really relate to the position that your pupil is applying for.