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Dear colleagues, Could you proofread the following text? Since I got the umbrella, I had been almost always staying in the garden on hot days. The shaded area was huge,.. Sadly, the strong wind blew and broke it down, as it hadn�t been wind-resistant. Fortunately, it has only one arm damaged and its pocket torn. (It happened yesterday.) Many thanks in advance!
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22 Jun 2018
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ldthemagicman
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Dear glutenfree: Here is my suggestion. �Since I got the umbrella, I have been almost always staying in the garden on hot days. The shaded area is huge. Sadly, as the umbrella wasn �t wind-resistant, a strong wind blew and broke it down. Fortunately, it has only one arm damaged and its pocket is torn. � Since I got the umbrella, I had been almost always staying in the garden on hot days. The shaded area was huge,.. Sadly, the strong wind blew and broke it down, as it hadn�t been wind-resistant. Fortunately, it has only one arm damaged and its pocket torn. (It happened yesterday.)
I hope that this helps you. Les Douglas
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23 Jun 2018
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glutenfree
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Thank you so much for your suggestion, Les. I really appreciate it. |
23 Jun 2018
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ldthemagicman
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Dear glutenfree: I don �t like altering your Post too much, because then, it becomes MY text and not YOURS. However, on reflection, I think that this part is better: "Sadly, as the umbrella wasn �t wind-resistant, a strong wind blew it down. Fortunately, ... " Sadly, as the umbrella wasn �t wind-resistant, a strong wind blew and broke it down. Fortunately Les Douglas
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23 Jun 2018
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glutenfree
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Thank you very much! This really helped me! |
23 Jun 2018
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