I am really excited today. I enjoy every minute - I am enjoying
of my life here. No wonder! Now I�m a student of the - I-d take out "now"
Russian University of Theatre Arts.4) It sounds great! - It is great -not sounds
Let me introduce myself. My first name is Max, - ok
my surname is Belov. I come from Belgorod. My family - ok
lives there. My grandparents are theatre people to the - ok
bone. They love theatre. They work at the theatre: my - They love it./work in theatre
Grandfather is 6) a stage director, my Grandmother - do not capitalise "grand"
is a retired actress, my Dad is a set designer, - dad not Dad
my Mom is a dancer. I�m nineteen year old. I�m not - mom not Mom, years
married, but I have got a girlfriend. Her name is Kate. - ok
She is clever and beautiful. She is an art student too. - ok
I live in the dormitory. I share a room with two - ok
other boys. They are brothers. Alex is twenty year - years
old, he is a dancer. Mark is seventeen and he is - ok
a gifted singer. He sings country songs very well. - ok
I �m a person of many talents. I�m very good at - ok
playing the guitar and hip-hop dancing. My teacher - ok
says that I sing very well. I can also play the violin. - ok
I�m very interested in art. I like going to the theatre. - ok
I want to be a good drama actor. My dream is - ok
to play in one of the Moscow theatres. - act not play or "be in a play"
The job of an actor is hard, but it�s interesting. - ok
My favourite actor is Yevgeniy Mironov. He is very - ok
talented and plays on the stage of the Moscow Art - acts on stage/is part of
Theatre. He is an art director of the State Theatre - at not of
of Nations. Also he is a true movie star. I�m very - He is also
impressed with his characters on the screen. - ok
The students must work hard to be professional actors. - Students, not "the students"
The theatres want hardworking and creative actors. - Theatres, not "the theatres"
Like Sophia says, do not over use good. Think of other words to describe things.
